Saturday, 1 August 2015

Rhyme Is My Prime

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I walk through the miles,

Wearing a wide smile.

I trust to the core,

Get crushed more and more.

I get subdued by the fate,

Thrashed by the hate.

I see the melancholy shadows,

Savage invasion of sorrows.

But..

I can spot the sun shining,

And the dreadful darkness declining.

I'll rise as a morning Sun,

Fight back till the night's done.

I'll wrestle with these tough times,

Penning my brawny broody rhymes..

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43 comments:
  1. Udit Sharma1 August 2015 at 14:39

    Loved the flow of it, not a fan of rhymes tho I loved the idea about it. Quite inspiring

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    1. Deeshani2 August 2015 at 03:30

      Thank you Udit.. I'm glad you liked the idea.. keep visiting :)

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  2. Unknown1 August 2015 at 17:21

    beautiful... love the positivity of the whole poem... :-)

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    1. Deeshani2 August 2015 at 03:35

      Thanks much dear.. It's always so good to see your comments :)

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  3. Uppal1 August 2015 at 18:37

    Last two lines sum up the positive approach!

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    1. Deeshani2 August 2015 at 03:41


      thanks much for reading and appreciating it ma'am! :)

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  4. Vishal Bheeroo1 August 2015 at 19:11

    Delightful poem spinning positive vibes. Great one Deeshani:)

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    1. Deeshani2 August 2015 at 08:35

      So glad to know that Vishal.. thanks for stopping by :)

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  5. Rakesh1 August 2015 at 20:31

    Beautiful and free flowing! What else one can want from a poem!

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  6. Ashish Kumar1 August 2015 at 21:09

    great poem... loved the way you penned it beautifully... At the same time this poem has a positive conclusion to fight and learn from the sun which is awesome...

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    1. Deeshani2 August 2015 at 08:39

      Thanks a ton Ashish.. I'm glad you found it so:)

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  7. Teny2 August 2015 at 02:18

    This one has inspired me for the day :)

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    1. Deeshani2 August 2015 at 08:45

      And this comment has inspired me to write more ;) Thanks for stopping by Teny :)

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  8. Unknown2 August 2015 at 07:34

    Quite soulful as always Deeshani :) But, "I see the melancholy shadows, Savage invasion of sorrows." is want grooved me in to the core <3 Super!

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    1. Deeshani2 August 2015 at 08:47

      I'm so glad to know that Maitreni :) Your lovely comments always stimulate my blogger side :) Hugs!<3

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  9. Purba chakraborty2 August 2015 at 14:37

    I love the way you rhyme and play with words! A lovely poem, dear :)

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    1. Deeshani3 August 2015 at 12:36

      Thanks a ton..! Purba.. I'm glad you loved it :)

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  10. Unknown2 August 2015 at 20:28

    Optimism gains over all the obstacles.... perseverance helps us to become a winner at the end of the day.... :-) Beautifully penned, dear...

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  11. Yash3 August 2015 at 02:00

    Great!
    Copied an pasted in my word file!
    I will try to read every morning to keep my spirits high!
    Thanks for sharing!

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    1. Deeshani3 August 2015 at 12:37

      Hey, thanks Yash.. I'm glad that it could motivate you so much :)

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  12. Darshith Badiyani3 August 2015 at 02:23

    Inspiring and full of fight-back spirit. Captivating the inner demons takes more effort and some inspiration goes a long way :)

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    1. Deeshani3 August 2015 at 12:39

      Yes Indeed it does :) Many thanks for stopping by Darshith :)

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  13. Bikramjit Singh Mann3 August 2015 at 05:50

    Indeed Fight back and Keep at it and the tough times soon vanish ..

    lovely positive poem..

    Bikram's

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    1. Deeshani3 August 2015 at 12:39

      Thanks a lot.. and welcome to my blog :)

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  14. Saru Singhal3 August 2015 at 06:45

    Spirit matters. An inspiring poem. As Napoleon said - Death is nothing, but to live defeated and inglorious is to die daily.

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    1. Deeshani3 August 2015 at 12:42

      A great quote indeed! Spirit is all what it takes to reach the destination along with the hard work.. thank you so much :)

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  15. Unknown3 August 2015 at 10:19

    Your poem might be broody but the spirit of optimism shines through in it Deeshani, and the words flow effortlessly.

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    1. Deeshani3 August 2015 at 12:43

      Thanks a lot dear.. I'm glad to hear your kind words.. keep visiting :)

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  16. Sri Kri3 August 2015 at 21:50

    Loving the Inspiring poem.You have penned it down very well Deeshani.Words flow naturally.Great Talent.

    Cheers,
    Sriram & Krithiga

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    1. Deeshani4 August 2015 at 01:43

      Thank you so much for your kind words :)

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  17. Indrani4 August 2015 at 05:15

    That is so positive. Very well written.

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  18. Unknown4 August 2015 at 08:31

    So beautiful :)

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  19. Ox-y-moron4 August 2015 at 08:53

    Depression is like the dark night but there is light at the end of the tunnel as you rightly express....

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    1. Deeshani4 August 2015 at 13:34

      Rightly said.. Thanks much for stopping by :)

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  20. Tarang Sinha4 August 2015 at 15:21

    Nice flow and gist of the poem. Rhyme is Prime...I find rhyming poems a little difficult. I write freestyle generally :)

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    1. Deeshani4 August 2015 at 15:44

      Haha, my case is the other way round.. I find rhyming much easier than freestyle :D Thank you so much..and welcome to my blog :)

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  21. Lovelorn MS4 August 2015 at 23:26

    Lovely Poem!

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    1. Deeshani6 August 2015 at 22:22

      Thank you so much.. and welcome to my blog :)

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  22. Andy23 November 2015 at 02:25

    Nice lines... keeping them coming..

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